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From: Peter
Date: 02 Nov 2003
Time: 21:37:50 -0000
Remote Name: 82.36.156.71
This has a really strong beat and rhyme which is fantastic, Rukhsaar. It makes it very clear and strong. I think I understand your poem, but I wonder if you can make it any better by telling a little more about what happened. I have copied it onto the web page. Have a look at it again, and see if you can improve it in any way.